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It’s been raining all day today. It wasn’t supposed too, it was supposed to snow, but I guess it was just not meant to be. It sort of reminds me of life, you expect and anticipate one thing, but you usually end up with having to settle for something much less desirable. However, unlike the weather, you can attempt to alter the forecast of your life, if you’re willing to try.
My neighbor, a red-tailed hawk, sits atop an old power pole as he searches for his next meal, while I watch from inside my warm dry house. He doesn’t seem to mind the rain and even though I can’t see him that well, I’m sure the water is rolling off his feathers, while underneath he is just as dry and warm as I am. He has every right to complain and hide himself away, be he does not, choosing instead to weather the cold rain and live, thrive.
Suddenly, he swoops down into the tall winter wheat after something he deems worthy to be his next meal. As my eyes follow him, I notice that some of the rain has become thicker and whiter.



strange how things can change
from one moment
to the next



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©2006-2010 `MSJames
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A little scene that played out today and got me inspired to write it down.

Haibun
A form of Japanese prose, written with a haiku-like attitude about an experience, a person or place, followed by a haiku or tanka that captures the essence of the piece.

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:iconacornsoup:
this is written in such a pretty style. good job :+fav:

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<3 mousie
:iconacornsoup:
this is written in such a pretty style. good job :+fav:

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<3 mousie
:iconmsjames:
:D
Thanks, for the kind words and the Fav!

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
:iconangelad:
:D

I like this one, makes the day seem not so gloomy!
I like it that your hawk has made another appearance!
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Good haibun. I think it could be improved if you did some heavy editting in the first paragraph. Get your exacto knife ready.
Two suggestions:
1- Check your verb tense and change them from past to present. This will keep it 'in the moment'.
2- "It sort of reminds me of life, you expect and anticipate one thing, but you usually end up with having to settle for something much less desirable." Philosophy is too abstract; maybe continue using weather images and words in metaphor to get your meaning across.

But I adored the passage about the red tailed hawk....wonderful.

Hope it helps =)

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:iconmsjames:
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Thanks, it was all real world stuff and that makes it so much better!
I'll review the tesnes and the edit suggestion!

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin
:iconleoniezurakowsky:
Lovely verse!

I do like your story about the hawk! I look at my cats like that everyday - even though they don't have to "earn" a living! The 3 of us are better at fun! and sleeping!

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Take care, :peace:, LZ
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:iconmsjames:
Thanks :hug:

Yeah, it all came together because of him. When I saw him sitting out in the rain, watching, hunting. I knew there was more there than I was seeing!

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may Beelzebub's scrotum rest firmly on your chin

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